He walked into the stadium, his head held high.As the players strode to the field, he and the opponent captain stepped forward to the referees. They shook hands and tossed a coin. "Heads" he said. It turned out to be tails and the opponent team started off. As the game progressed, the crowd cheered wildly. This was the finals of the FA cup. Chelsea versus Liverpool. At the 42nd minute, he received a cross from his teammate. He finished it with a curling shot to the top right hand corner of the net. The opponent goalkeeper was too stunned to react. Chelsea secured a 1-0 lead by the first half. The second half soon commenced. The manager had a change of tactics and now ordered him to position himself at the right flank. The game progressed and both chelsea and liverpool had chances. Finally, when it came to the 90th minute, the score looked like it would be a 1-0 victory to chelsea, he sprinted down the right flank and shot a powerful curling shot. It went behind the line and he celebrated by sliding on the grass. His teammates were shouting"Good job Torres!"
All the training for this match had paid off
Good job! I feel that this is a very well-done blog post as there is a lot of vivid description. I really like the way you describe the process in which the goals are scored. You used simple but effective phrases like"curling shot to the top right hand corner of the net", instead of the ball entered the net. This gives us a better impression on where the ball lands and increases the atmosphere. Also, you give some cool descriptions such as "it(the ball) went behind the line", and Torres "sliding on the grass". I feel that your descriptions are nice and useful to increase the nerve-wrecking atmosphere in a football field! Lastly, I would also like to commend you on your nice ending. Instead of telling us which team had won the match, you just mentioned "the training for this match had paid off". Thus, this is a nice ending as it is a cliffhanger which lets us guess which team wins during extra time or penalties. Overall, this is a great piece of work, however, I would like to point out that Torres is now in Chelsea!
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